I’ve always wanted to learn to scuba dive, because I love to explore new and exciting places. Ever since I was a little girl, the ocean has fascinated me. I used to sit on the beach and watch the minnows dart about in the ocean, wishing I could be with them discovering the mysteries of the deep blue. Last summer, I snorkeled for the first time and loved it. I explored the reefs of the Florida Keys and got to see the colorful underwater world I often dreamed about, but had only ever seen in books and at the aquarium. I fell in love with the bright neon colors of the tropical fish, and the graceful dolphins that played in the surf. I was envious of the scuba divers who could dive down very deep and peer in dark holes, never needing to surface for breath. Right then and there, I promised myself I would learn to scuba one day. I knew that eventually I would be among those scuba divers exploring the deepest reefs and trenches. That was my dream, and I know that one day it will come true.
I am 13 and I just want you to tell me if I made any mistakes or need to change anything please!
Thansk for the positive feedback. I am a little young to be deciding about my future definitely, but I have considered going into marine biology…
Thanks for the speedy answers. I’ve already turned it in, and removed some of the commas. (Thanks, Hispanophile!)
I know this work is not good eoguh for a publisher, and I won’t choose your answera s best just because you say it is.

It’s a seventh grade homework assignment, for goodness’s sake!